Friday, 28 October 2016

Into the cave!!

Walt: write a narrative
Walt: demonstrate understanding of a number of strategies and skills for writing
(for example, use of paragraphs, a range of sentence types, descriptive language, punctuation, spelling)
On the last day of school Lisa asked her friends Joey, Laura and James if they wanted to go on a trip to a waterfall because it was going to be the holidays. They all said yes after asking their parents. Laura’s mum said that since laura is going then she is going to. So they all went on the first day of the holidays.

When the time came james had to go with lisa, and joey had to go with laura. They were all so excited to see the waterfall when they got there it was sun burning hot. so they got ready to go, and put sunscreen on then got ready to go. Lisa’s mum grabbed lauren's hand (Laura’s mum) and told her what are you waiting for. Then she ran to the cave that led them to the waterfall. They all were wearing summer clothes and was reading to go to the waterfall.

They ran to the cave then Suddenly james fell into a weird place “help” james shouted. Lisa came running she asked him what happened? He answered he just fell. Lisa helped him out. James called the other but told Joey to tell the adults that they are going to hangout in the sun for a little while near the cars on the grass. Luckily the parents said it was alright and said for them to come in the water when they were too hot.

Lisa ran to the car for a shovel then started digging the hole that James fell in. Laura had to stay at the end where her mum was but not to close so when they ask them something she could just answer. Lisa was getting pretty tired but she got through the hole thing just in time. James said “it kind of looks like a secret passageway” Joey agreed. Lisa went down the stairs that led to a place full of gold “to bad for laura who can’t see this” said James. “I am right here”she answered lisa told her why are you here aren’t you meant to look out for our mums!! Laura told her that they fell asleep on their chairs.

“It is getting kind of dark” joey said. They all started looking at all different kinds of gold Joey even found 10 million dollars. They all started grabbing gold and money jewels all kind of good things. Until Joey grabbed something he thought it wasn’t stuck then he pulled it harder then finally grabbed it. The way out started to close!!! Laura was getting scared. “Hey I worked hard for that, very hard” Lisa said. They were yelling for help Joey even tried putting that thing back but it didn’t work. Luckily James still had the shovel in his hand he tried pushing the top of but it was too hard.

They managed to find their way out because James started digging and it led to the back of the waterfall they decided to have a swim. They all dived in and never went into places with a lot of gold ever again.

Task Description: This story was real tricky but I got though it. It may be kind of confusing but it is because I have never been in a cave before. Here is the image attribution right here. I just hope you like my story!!.

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